Haunted cemetery
Shadows speak to me as they crawl up my sleeve, cold like silver gloom. I walk in the mist feeling on edge, unsure if I’ll fall and die. I feel nervous and unsteady as I navigate blindly , stumbling and tripping.i hear screaming in the Distance i scamper over as fasts as i could there was a little boy being piled into a grave aaaaaaaaaaaaaaa ahhhhhhhhhh i was so frightened i notst the face of the little boy i suddenly realized IT”S MY BROTHER!!! So i pulled the there leg as hard as i could POP! the zombie let go now all of the zombies are crazy mad we flee with every stumble and trip THEN …. I woke up i’m so relieved it was a dream wait double check i walk out over my bedroom door and ….
by Sophie what do you think
I think you have written a good piece of creative writing. I like how you are trying to build suspense by showing not telling. Next time think about your punctuation and paragraphs - having spacing can create suspense too ;)
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